23 demo

I wrote this song that I'm calling "23" about a month ago. Around the same time I had gotten some recording equipment; a mic, preamp etc.. Since then I've been fiddling around on my 4 track, and sorta getting some arrangement ideas.
At one point I had gone to my friend Kevin's house and recorded a quick run of it the day I finished it. Thus, the lyrical mistakes and such.
Tonight I've been recording, and I got the whole song to sound pretty decent. I can never get the vocals to sound right apparently. I was just recording on Garageband on my Mac. Well, when I exported it for some reason it was barely audible. I went back in, and cranked all the tracks. Not much luck. It sounds alright, but the vocals are hard to hear. I'm uploading it anyway to give an idea of how the song is evolving. Disregard that I sound like I have no sense of pitch.

First recording.
Second recording.

Also I'll leave you with the director's cut of Hanson's video for the song Underneath. It's one of my favorites.